As I stare down onto the island I wonder what will happen to Jacks group next. But while Ralph and Piggy are back on the island being so steadfast I can also see my home in war. When i Stood on the mountain talking to the Lord of the Flies I really thought about what would come next and he warned me about what danger it is to be on this island and to live with all of the other boys. I walked close to the beastie and I realized that it had something on top of it, it was not a beast it was a dead parachute guy, I had to tell the others what it was but as jack always being the corrupt guy he was he assumed I was the beast and killed my body but my soul lives up here in a safe place. When I heard Jack telling his hunters to kill me my last tear trickled down my face. I knew exactly what was going to happen. My whole life flashed before my eyes the good and the bad memories, even my achievements and the things I would never want to remember popped in my head. I was so tremulous, I felt like the whole world was on my back, I knew it was going to hurt, no one ever said dying was going to be easy, I learned I grew and I died.
3 comments:
Love this entry, Amber! The beginning hooked me in right away and everything followed after that. I could easily tell who's perspective you were speaking from. Also, while I was reading, I forgot which chapter you were making an entry about but you detail put me back on track! The only thing I would have to say is, include more of the conversation with the Lord of the Flies. That was a main part of the chapter.
Mia
Nice use of post-mortum perspective. But try elaborating / expounding on things like the beastie, what did it look like? Smell? thoughts on it?
Try thingsl ike that and you'll be fine.
I liked ur storyies u put alot of description into them especially this one I liked this part: When i Stood on the mountain talking to the Lord of the Flies I really thought about what would come next and he warned me. it got me to thinking
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